1) Remove credits at beginning 2) at about 0.48 dissolve into sea scape and use dissolve for all transitions to 0.52 otherwise it is a bit confusing. Or at o.48 insert a dissolve into clip of Lauren in bed then dissolve into sea scape etc to 0.52. 3) Always use a dissolve between a clip that moves from real time to fantasy. 4) At 2.21 or a little earlier dissolve the close up of Lauren's face in her fantasy costume into the face of Lauren in bed at 2.22. 5) Re credits and titles, if you want to use them role the name of the track and the band along the bottom of the final shot of the sea
Otherwise a HUGE IMPROVEMENT and jump cuts and fast editing amplifies the humour and in a sense humour tinged with sadness.
Well done Emily, just a few tweaks as advised above.
1) Remove credits at beginning
ReplyDelete2) at about 0.48 dissolve into sea scape and use dissolve for all transitions to 0.52 otherwise it is a bit confusing. Or at o.48 insert a dissolve into clip of Lauren in bed then dissolve into sea scape etc to 0.52.
3) Always use a dissolve between a clip that moves from real time to fantasy.
4) At 2.21 or a little earlier dissolve the close up of Lauren's face in her fantasy costume into the face of Lauren in bed at 2.22.
5) Re credits and titles, if you want to use them role the name of the track and the band along the bottom of the final shot of the sea
Otherwise a HUGE IMPROVEMENT and jump cuts and fast editing amplifies the humour and in a sense humour tinged with sadness.
Well done Emily, just a few tweaks as advised above.